Wednesday, 23 March 2016

Today I learnt to jump straight into the Story. I thought I did well but I still think I have to work on more Precise Words

I was scootering down the pathway and tripped on a bump. Blood came gushing out of my hip splating everywhere. I yelled for help then help arrived. It felt like someone was stabbing my hip with a Knife. I covered my deep graze with my T-Shirt hoping it would stop.

As I tried to walk home my graze kept getting soarer and soarer. “I can't wait till my pain stops” I said. It was getting worser now feeling like a Machete when I walk. The pain was killing me.  .  

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